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Post by shebangs17 on Jun 2, 2004 1:08:48 GMT -5
when will you let me understand? why these feelings you reprimand? just tell it straight to my face no more of this "all over the place". i want to be myself, im sick of trying. these feelings inside, sick of denying. like a movie, it plays over and over. it must be a dream, but no, i am sober. i cry in my sleep, wanting to hold you. i wake in my tears, not caring to see you. how many times do i have to wonder. whether my entire life is a blunder? i want it to end, just put it all out. i open my mouth, but i dont want to shout. i want to be quiet, my voice is all gone. i will leave, at the hour of dawn.
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Post by angel on Jun 2, 2004 22:23:53 GMT -5
This is such an awesome poem...but after a while the rhyming took over. too much rhyming, remember poems don't need to rhyme. This isn't that bad tho, it is really hard to make a good rhyming poem.
I hate being in that state. It is all in the way you think of things...and all that is on your mind is that one person...and they wont...go...away....
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