Still my breath

[NeverMore]

Do you know, just how hard it is to breathe when your face
is covered in tears? How with each gasp of air and each
reach for someone's hand, you reach out and nothing is
there?

You have felt the tenderness of love once in your life.
A soul mate, one you would call that which makes you complete has touched you.

Well, this is what I know exists in this life. That one
special soul, that simply by the sound of her voice, you fall
madly in love with her over and over again.

I believe that our Goddess brought us together with the most
beautiful yet fragil love that could be in this life.

Of course, as in all loves there are challenges that must
be faced and roads that must be taken. Ours was no different
despite who gave us this love.

If anything We were given a more difficult task at growing our
love. We had to prove ourselves worthy of the Goddess' Gift.

Challenges we faced were those of a nature that would have
destroyed any normal couple. Yet we grew through them and
grew so strong.

With this strength would always come a new challenge. Though
outside forces would challenge, the ground was held.

Yet as we are human, and we long so desperately for a love
bound by fate, we also fear fate. Though through it all, through
deception and losses, we carried on.

Though as if fate just picks up on life, life picks up on
fate and the smallest of things blows out the light and
something refuses fate entry.

For our love, we battled the biggest of beasts and won.

But then chose to loose, loose it all, to empty meaningless words.



Do not let the little words end you as they did us,
words are just words, give them open and free.

[bloodredtears]

this is very different from the rest of your writing...i have to admit it's not my favorite of yours, but there are some great things going on in here...

Do you know, just how hard it is to breathe when your face
is covered in tears? How with each gasp of air and each
reach for someone's hand, you reach out and nothing is
there?

when i first read that i thought you were going somewhere completely different with this piece..and i loved this stanza..

For our love, we battled the biggest of beasts and won.

But then chose to loose, loose it all, to empty meaningless words

also, these two lines were very meaningful...sometimes we put so much into the battle we have nothing left for the victory celebration afterwards...
cool stuff!

[NeverMore]

*S* I am going to have to say this... I think one of the things I like most about the Poet Club, is the fact that is someone does not find a poem to their top liking, that does not deter them from saying what they think. This is an extreamly important fact in my eyes.

Now for a bit of what I was feeling and thinking when this was written, mainly because this poem is one of my special ones, likely to me alone though... When this was written, I was very much off the edge. I was hurting and depressed, yet so deep in love I could not see the forest through the trees. So it would read a bit strange to most. Me, I get the luck on this one of being able to feel what I felt (if you can call that luck *L*) .. others get to feel what they read only...

Again I am going to say this, you have no idea how good it feels to have people say their honest opinion of my work. I never expect everyone to like everything I write, in fact, I hope sometimes what I write is out right hated. It makes up a part of who I am. A very odd, very feeling, long haired squirrel