Horn
Novice
Give me wings; I want to fly with someone by my side, wherever the wind takes us
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Post by Horn on May 4, 2004 3:28:23 GMT -5
Me, Myself, and I Please let me take off this mask, I am afraid to take it off, I feel naked without it; Please give me the freedom That I could never taste
Without that mask, You can see the true me, The pessimistic, careless, unobservant, ugly slob, The foolish child that I really am, The ever-questioning hypocrisy, The boring, lazy rock whom You will come to hate
The crazy one who has mastered The art of silence, The one who shakes as violently As an earthquake, Can act so pathetically Constantly avoiding the people, the judges, I need to escape from this evil world
I hate who I have come out to be… The face in the mirror staring back at me Has become my despised enemy... I want to break you! I want to feel the shattered shards of glass Cutting into my bloody hand In a wonderful sensation of pain
Not good enough, These expectations are all Weighing me down so, They are too much to bear, I shall become a failure, rejected
Too scared to talk, Too scared to show, Too scared to smile, Too scared to insult, Too scared to rebel, Too scared to do anything anymore
I hate fear controlling my life… F*ck me...
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Hunter
Virtuoso
Fallen Angel
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Post by Hunter on May 4, 2004 6:24:41 GMT -5
Well done.
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Post by bloodredtears on May 4, 2004 10:02:02 GMT -5
wow...there are so many raw emotions in this piece...i actually have felt a lot of this in my life, so i know what you're talking about. the last line of this poem really ties it together in a powerfully emotional and emphatic way...great job!
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amberputis
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~Dreams are determined by our hearts, and our dreams design the future~
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Post by amberputis on May 4, 2004 19:54:42 GMT -5
this was great, as kris said, yes definitely a lot of emotions, but with that can make up some of the best poetry! I happened to really like it, great job!
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Post by John Barnett on May 5, 2004 15:58:55 GMT -5
Very good, I enjoyed this one
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