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Post by Mikepoet on Apr 30, 2004 15:27:45 GMT -5
I see a bad girl. She’s going to church. Going to try to pray her way.
Pray her way into heaven And for what its worth, I see her praying every day.
She knows that she’s a sinner. She’s thinking about some sin. But first she needs to ask forgiveness. So that heaven might let her in.
She prays for her alcoholic father And for her illegitimate child. A big thank you prayer for her loving mother. Who never gave up hope all the while.
See that bad girl, She’s coming out of church. A smile as bright as day. Tickets to heaven are found in church. All you gotta do is pray.
She knows that she’s a sinner. She ‘s about to do some sin. But she spoke with God, to clear her conscious, So that heaven might let her in.
Her job is a spiritual bother. But it pays well and feeds her child. A big thank you prayer , for the body God gave her. And the tricks of the trade. She’s tricked for awhile.
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Post by angel on May 1, 2004 0:07:58 GMT -5
u say "prey" like prey on an animal. did you intend to mean that prey, or did you mean "pray?" Some of this I got lost in, but the jist of it I like. Its wierd, how ever messed up, dirty, or sinned up you can be...you are always welcome to church...always deserve that second chance...
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Post by Mikepoet on May 1, 2004 8:34:45 GMT -5
Thank you for bringing this to my attention.
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Post by Alex'z Death Chic on May 1, 2004 8:43:20 GMT -5
hmm... I like this.... I just didn't like the fact you called her "bad girl"... Dunno.... its just me... but i really like the poem...
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Post by Mikepoet on May 1, 2004 10:18:28 GMT -5
Thank you ;D This is through the eyes she sees herself. The name society has given a single Mother who..well..you know has to exist through the God given body she has.
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Post by amberputis on May 1, 2004 15:10:37 GMT -5
this was great, i liked it mikepoet, well done
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Post by Mikepoet on May 1, 2004 15:27:12 GMT -5
Thank you again amber
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Post by Hunter on May 4, 2004 5:06:32 GMT -5
Mike, as a bad girl, I like this.
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Post by Mikepoet on May 4, 2004 9:40:35 GMT -5
Hawkette! You a bad girl! I had no clue, ;DWell maby I did have a clue.
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Post by T.J. Barber on May 5, 2004 16:25:43 GMT -5
Very nice poem Mike. I enjoyed reading this piece very much. Your intense nature and relative ending was very subtle and nice...Great job, TJ
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Post by Mikepoet on May 5, 2004 20:48:06 GMT -5
Thanks, this was a poem I guess for single mothers who have to do one of the oldest jobs in the history of nature. I am glad you like my poetry. ;D
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