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Post by kemleth on Feb 23, 2004 7:00:56 GMT -5
Give away what you dont view as preciouse,
Bruised knees pray under a twilight sky...
Another day of labels and pretence,
another excuse to crucify...
Scrying through your eyes,
I can see the horrors...
No more voice in my ears speaking peace,
all i have is these visions haunting me...
And I see my way, burning through you...
And I feel my pain, bleeding through...
Is there another way?
That leaves no one to blame?
Who am I to complain?
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amberputis
Virtuoso
~Dreams are determined by our hearts, and our dreams design the future~
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Post by amberputis on Feb 23, 2004 19:19:11 GMT -5
hmm this was great, i just found it a little misunderstanding, but i'm almost positive that it's just me so good job, and welcome!  |
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Post by bloodredtears on Feb 24, 2004 0:46:35 GMT -5
this is a good piece...i'm not sure i got the full meaning either, but i have a nice idea...good job!
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Post by kronicdaze on Feb 24, 2004 6:09:40 GMT -5
Nice!...I loved this...good sh*t...lata
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Post by kemleth on Feb 24, 2004 6:25:22 GMT -5
The Idea behind my writing is for everyone to develope their own ideas and conclusions. I want the experience to be different for everyone. Feel free to ask questions if you dont understand, and I find that the first thought that usualy floats into your head is the one that you should go with, in reference to this peice, I hope that evryone took something away with them and i hoped you pondered the meaning for you after you read it!
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Chaotic_Thetis
Apprentice
Bleed me! For i have witnessed yet remained silent.Slay me! For i had your love and kept it.
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Post by Chaotic_Thetis on Feb 24, 2004 13:04:17 GMT -5
It definitely leaves room for interperation which i quite like, rather thought provoking in the sense that it creates various images that may or may not be connected. Nicely written ^_^
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Post by John Barnett on Feb 24, 2004 15:18:46 GMT -5
Great write.
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Post by SilverEyes on Feb 24, 2004 18:49:29 GMT -5
This is quite interesting and worth reading several times. Each stanza says something different and combined it's a little mind boggling. I'll have to puzzle over it some more. Nice write.
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Eclipse
Apprentice
It's not a matter of luck, it's just a matter of time.
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Post by Eclipse on Feb 24, 2004 19:14:40 GMT -5
i enjoyed this because it causes the reader to reread and ponder over the meaning which is the reader's own interpretation. very interesting. i also liked how you didn't have a defined rhyme scheme throughout all the stanzas. it made it feel almost spontaneous.
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