You...

[amberputis]

You carried my world
as I floated in heaven
You faught to gain acceptance
as I swam in guilt
You lived with your title
as I attempted to prove false
You always held a smile
as I smiled in return
You knew what to say and what not to
as I stumbled upon words
You made my life better
as I f***** it up
You some how slipped away
as I watched one of the best things that ever happened to me, walk out of my life

[Chaotic_Thetis]

A rather tragic ending yet so often it happens, nicely set out and written ^_^

[SilverEyes]

I like the repitition of every other line and this has a nice flow. Sorry about the tragic ending. Nice write.

[bloodredtears]

i really like the flow of this piece..it is wonderfully done and the last line is my fav...because it strikes a chord in me...great job!

[kronicdaze]

I loved the begining...The one rhyming part kinda thru me off...but otha then that I really liked this...good sh*t...lata