Wish You Were Here

[SilverEyes]

Hey My Liege,
How’s life?
Have you been causing lots of strife?
Didn’t you just start school?
Are you drowning in knowledge’s pool?
Is it fun at Portal?
Are you making your name immortal?
What is that you ask?
Me? I’m just hiding behind my face mask
At home I sit
It’s like I’m trapped in a deep, dark pit
People think I’m happy
But I’m really feeling rather crappy
Sometimes my angers rise
Then my life I do despise
Other times my sadness reigns
I don’t know if I can take all this pain
Then loneliness comes with its one two punch
Why can’t it go out to lunch?
My God I wish you were here
You take away all my fears
I want you to take me in your arms
They protect me like magical charms
I want to hear your heart beat
It makes my happiness more concrete
I want to share a kiss
It’ll make loneliness’ bullet miss
I want us to lie in a big, fluffy bed
Then I won’t want to see my blood’s crimson red
I want you to say it’ll be alright
Then the world will seem more bright
Wishing you were here
So you can take away my tears
Love,
Your Lady

[amberputis]

Theres one imparticular reason why I liked this so much, you used every day language, the simplest yet most meaningful words in our english dictionary. We all understand the meaning of 'crappy' and can picture 'a big fluffy bed'. To express our knowledge of writing and expanded vocabulary, doesn't necessarily make us a higher class than the other, in a sence of whos a great writer or poet, and you definitely proved that! wonderful job.

[bloodredtears]

i also perfer the simplistic stuff to big long words that like 2% of the human population understands...i think it makes it more down-to-earth and connected...this is a wonderful piece for that...great job!

[JosephScottMorris]

I like this poem, if you used a few stanzas, that would make for easier reading.Overall I like it,Thanks for sharing it! ;DJoe

[Seth]

Simplicity suits this quite well, I loved readong each line and being able to understand each word. as said before, it makes it more down-to-earth and connected.