NeverMore
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May 10, 2004 2:27:51 GMT -5
Post by NeverMore on May 10, 2004 2:27:51 GMT -5
In the quiet of her heart
when time seems to stall
if things don't fall in place
with pain from unknown places
Love her with all my life
hold her with my heart
show her that these arms
will never go away
when it rains on her parade
if the sun forgets to shine
flowers do not bloom
the birds forget to sing
My love will stand strong
this man will try to hear
when words can not explain
I will listen to her breath
This circle that she's given me
the love that she gives
will hold through any storm
will stand the tests of time
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May 14, 2004 16:20:35 GMT -5
Post by bloodredtears on May 14, 2004 16:20:35 GMT -5
great piece...seemed more romantic than a heart scorned...but still very good...great job!
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May 15, 2004 0:41:34 GMT -5
Post by NeverMore on May 15, 2004 0:41:34 GMT -5
to explain just a bit .. I used the word given, sort of in the hope people would read this knowing it was written as someone said good bye.. I know we all read poems with our own thoughts, yet for me, this is sad, painful, yet with a hope for her to have a good life.. to me, it fits in no real section and can be read with a smile or a tear.
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May 15, 2004 20:22:06 GMT -5
Post by bloodredtears on May 15, 2004 20:22:06 GMT -5
i can see how it would be sad if she rejected you...i guess since i'm a woman i'd love to have a man feel that much love for me  but...like i already said this is a wonderful poem...thanks for sharing what you meant from your viewpoint...it really gives life to the poem! |
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but...like i already said this is a wonderful poem...thanks for sharing what you meant from your viewpoint...it really gives life to the poem!