Seth
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Posts: 411
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Post by Seth on Aug 22, 2004 9:31:13 GMT -5
Silent night filled with grim repose, It's better now than it was before- I suppose. Lying awake, staring up at a blank ceiling, At least I'm no longer crying or bleeding.
Standing up in the darkness- I just can't sleep, But I'm not clutching my pillow as I weep. Walking quietly to my window, No longer staggering as red crimson flows.
I feel empty and not completely whole, But I used to feel lonely and so very cold. With a sigh and a gloomy stare up at the stars, I remember the tears, the pain and the scars.
Shutting the window and finding the bed, A while back I'd have wished myself dead. And now I'm here--I'm not hurting anymore, But like then, I feel I'm still missing something more.
And in the silence that surrounds my home, I realize just like then, I am still so alone. Even though the tears no longer fall from my eyes, I'm still suffering a lonely demise.
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Post by angel on Aug 24, 2004 17:26:16 GMT -5
I really like this, it flows in a very neat way. It put me on a cloud and floated me away...nice write
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Post by bloodredtears on Aug 27, 2004 22:59:13 GMT -5
this is an amazing write...the inner strength shown here, along with the vulnerability that cannot be completely shed is amazing...and the fact that you're surviving despite the vulnerablitity only culminates to show just how strong you are! beautifully done!
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Post by X x K e l Z x X on Sept 10, 2004 16:16:15 GMT -5
This is very strong and deep, very good!
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Post by alostandbrokensoul on Sept 13, 2004 20:41:56 GMT -5
I love it, the word flow and how it was all put together I like it alot!
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